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Monday, February 20, 2012

Monday Morning



I am learning to write an introduction that hooks in my audience.Here are 3 versions.Which Monday Morning introduction do you like the best and why?


Every Monday it fells like I only get to got to sleep for one minute!Seriously it’s like I went to sleep at 1.00 am.Actually I did (I think).Did you know that every Monday when I'm told to get changed I lie down and when my parents come I stand up and pretend I'm getting changed.

Dreaming happily about chocolate I heard a stomp “Boom Boom Boom” .I saw a chocolate monster saying get up in a very very deep voice.My eyes flung open and my mum was shouting “ GET UP”.

Mouth watering chocolate donuts I dreamt about.My happy meter was one thousand and ten present.Then suddenly it went all the way down to the big zero,as my um was screaming “Get up.” What a horrible Monday (as usual. )

4 comments:

  1. HAHAHA! You a a funny boy. I'm telling Mum you called her a chocolate monster. By the way now I know that you lie back down when I leave the room. *busted*

    The introduction I like the best was the last one "Mouth watering chocolate..." because you are using words to create interesting and colourful images in my head.

    Your happy meter must be broken?

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  2. Hi Esrah I like you writing it is so cool my Favorite paragraph was 2

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  3. Hi Esrah,

    It's the chocolate monster you always dreamed of...(haha).
    Your introduction hooks are really funny Esrah. My favourite hook would be the second one.

    Keep up the good work Esrah!

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